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I rested with a light pink blooming cherry-tree branch on my chest. The wind flowed along the river banks, somewhere out of sight, beyond the buildings and the yard. My silk attire lay on the ground like the wings of a butterfly, and the brook flowed past me in the direction of the snow-topped mountains.

I wished you had picked me up like a flower from the garden, held my flourishing body for a while before I wilted away. You could have been handsome like a pine tree, your eyes always the same green. We could have lived entwined with each other like light and shade.

When I walked around these yards, the Moon followed me among the pillars and watched me through the windows. I put a little doll that looked like me into one of the miniature temples and placed a tiny garland on her hair. Every night, the doll sang to me of distant lands on the border between dreams and reality.

I saw you every day in the daylight, riding along the sides of the mountains and the linings of the clouds on a silver dragon. You held its fluttering whiskers and pressed your heels against its scaled sides, as it threw its head wildly and tried to bite your hands. You were protected by the signs written onto your forehead that you had found behind seven dark lakes.

People cut the wings of birds, put shackles on their feet and look at them as terrified as if they were looking at themselves. They enchant dragons and make them swim around the garden pond, underneath the leaves of the waterlilies. They bind saplings while they are still growing, just like they tie the feet of their children, so that the entire creation and the humankind could share in the same pain.

I have drunk the moonlight and the blood of the animals and seen all the bones that had to be broken for my sake. The beast holds my wrists in its claws. I am in a banquet where creatures tread in a line over the hazy border and I cannot close my eyes.

If you had been next to me, I would have embroidered our existence on your skin with a golden needle. The pain would have forced you to recognize the unnatural things we do for each other. While I was tearing off the petals of the flowers in search for love and reading the end of the world from the innards of a bird, I perhaps only searched for a reason to kill.

I wove between letters all that I did not dare to say aloud. I painted the porcelain doll eyes that see dreams that bind me to this world. I made the creatures I had created fight for their lives.

The days spin silk on the tree branches. In the fragile palace upon hack-berry branches caterpillars are endowed with wings, yet life like that of a leaf flying in the wind is filled with sadness. The butterfly becomes translucent in the light of the Sun.

I have wrapped spells around the columns of this house, so that the spirits would not breathe cold wind underneath my door. The specters gliding past pull the blanket from me at nights, and the wolves call to me from the hills.

Once, you opened your eyes in the middle of the night, and they shone like the eyes of a feline. When you opened them again at dawn, they were again grey and solid as the bedrock. I listened to how the walls of the house creak at nights, and your sleep-talking.

Some nights, I removed my clothes layer by layer and went swimming in the dark-watered garden pond. When I rose from beneath the waterlily leaves back onto the surface, the fireflies descended among the white petals of the waterlilies, and my tears mixed with the dripping water.

Should I have sent you a message on the back of a dragonfly, whispered among the rustling reeds? It is already too late to go after you. The story is finished, the pages of the book have been bound. My soul has sunken deep within, and there is just a fading glint of memories in my eyes.
A translation of a piece of stream of consciousness I just wrote in Finnish: [link]
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Memory is a surreal and dreamlike piece that enchants the reader with phantasmical writing from *tulinuotio ( Suggested by sincebecomeswhy and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2014
This is just so very beautiful and overflows with pure emotion. :heart:

Beautiful by KmyGraphic  
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D :heart:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014
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JestemBazyliszkiem Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013
This is a mega bomb for my imagination! :excited:
You were able to write down so many different emotions which did not became a chaos, but a pure poetry, something valuable which touches the heart. 
Simply saying- beautiful!
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, I'm so glad you think so. :blush: :boogie: What I really like to do is to evoke imaginations and to touch peoples' hearts! :heart: :D
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JestemBazyliszkiem Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
And you are doing a fine job at that! :D Such works are my favourite! :huggle: <3
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Student Writer
this was absolutely beautiful.
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm really happy you liked it. :) Thanks a lot for the watch, too! :D
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Zireael07 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is excellent!
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad you think so. :heart: ^^
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Comissari Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is incredible.
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D
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Hawkieface Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is absolutely amazing!
:clap:

If I asked you to, would you possibly go through something one of my friends wrote and make it sound as amazing as this!?

Thanks
-Hawkie :heart:

PS: I have also written a quote if you are willing to check that as well ;)
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! :heart: :D I don't know about editing other people's work though... :P
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Hawkieface Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!
I'll figure it out :P

Your poetry is amazing and you should be proud of it :heart::heart:
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ok. :) And thanks a lot, it makes me happy to hear you think so. :heart:
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Hawkieface Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, I feel guilty if I don't tell the truth :D
:heart::heart:
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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Hawkieface Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
;)
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! ^___^
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013
You're welcome~
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destynniehall Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
This is amazing, and it paints such a wonderfully majestic feel whilst reading it.
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, I'm so glad it evoked such a feeling. :D
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz: :iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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Kuume Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much!! :glomp: :D
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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Karinta Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful piece! Especially that it was written in Finnish originally.
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D :heart:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
You're very welcome. :-)
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artsyspirit Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so awesome!!!!!!!! :D
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks a lot. :D :D
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artsyspirit Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :D
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KiwiKat10 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
Wow!! Thats really deep! Good job :)
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D You also have a Ghibli avatar! I actually thought about Haku when I wrote about the silver dragon.
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KiwiKat10 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
Your welcome!! Hehe :) Your's is Kiki right??
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, that's right. :D
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Azul-din Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
I really thought I had already added my congratulations earlier but let me join the applause anyway! An honor well deserved!
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :tighthug: This is a day that I'll remember...
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Azul-din Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
:tighthug: (sigh)
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elecxra Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Congratulations on the totally awesome Daily Deviation! Your work deserved it! ♥
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm really glad you think so! :hug:
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Ceresta Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Congratulations on your DD! :dance:
I'm usually not interested into any kind of poetry but I really enjoyed reading this poem!
The pictures it sent to my mind were beautiful and full of magic but also kind of oppressive. I really like how you formed a contrast between dreams and reality. And the way you changed the motifs so smoothly without making the reader troubled with the fast changes is really fascinating. It really felt like a dream silently changing its direction every few seconds.
Well, those are the words from someone who has absolutely no sense for literature and poetry. :D But I really like it, a well deserved DD! :huggle:
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the kind words and the congratulations, I'm really happy you read it and enjoyed it, even though you say you don't read poetry! :D Indeed, it is a dreamlike scenery of both beauty and oppression, as I find the interaction of these opposites especially interesting. I like to make complete "scenes", where the reader can wander and encounter different poetic things so that they form a somewhat unified visual experience - I'm happy that you noticed the transitions. :tighthug:
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Ceresta Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're always welcome! :tighthug:
You know, I really admire you for being able to write in such a great style even though English isn't your native language! I would have great problems to write something like this in a language I can only speak and write half-decent. Well, I wouldn't be able to write something like this in any language actually. :D
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D Well, I'm really comfortable with English, but sometimes I lack the intuition to use the right particles etc. and I really need to double check things. :) It would be great to be able to write like this in any of the other languages that I've learned...
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Ceresta Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My English writing needs a lot more than a double check. :D
Which other languages did you learn? The only other language I can speak a bit is French but I almost forgot everything already...
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I've studied Swedish, French, Japanese and currently Chinese. :) I have a good basic grasp of the first three and can understand most that I read, but actually using them in a conversation without sounding like a retard is entirely another thing. :XD:
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Ceresta Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, you even can read Japanese and Chinese? I tried to learn some Japanese some time ago but I became lazy pretty soon. :XD:
At least I understand some Japanese from watching movies and Animes nearly everyday (and of course thanks to some basics I learned), but I can only form some really simple sentences myself. Everything else would turn out as a grammatical disaster. :D
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